I saw her, she was just sitting there. She was staring at a photo frame with tears running down her face. Inside it, there was a small photo of a man wearing an army uniform. The photo was in black and white and was covered in dust. I began to think who that man was and why the little old lady was crying. The emotional lady reminded me of the time that my grandfather was killed at war. I can still remember that day. The sound of my mother crying echoed throughout the room, and was able to be heard from my neighbors house. I know this because they came over and said " we could hear crying and we just wanted to check if everything was alright." But everything wasn't alright. Father works for Qantas and often goes away for several days. Unfortunately father was on his way to Bali that day and a piece of plastic got caught in the engine, and caused the plane to explode. When mother found out this tragic news the same day, it made her even more sad. After that grandma came to live with us to keep us company, and because she often got lonely.
To be continued!
Amazing story loved the start and the catch to it
I loved how you used the hook at the start.
He exploerd the outback of Spain
"What a site." He said in a dry voice.
Eagles flying upon him, snakes circling him. The endless sand amazed him, and made him think to him self,
"Is there an end to this world?"
As he took 1 step at a time, he pasts cactuses and tree branches on the ground. As his feet start to hurt like nails are in his feet from the stones on the ground.
"Here comes the wind." He said in a stressful voice. As the wind blows towards him, he gets pushed back down the dusty hill, and eventually has to move back becuase of the tragic wind that causes the dirt to fly up in his face.
I love the words and how describe everything.
Leaving are small beautiful town Wem as we leave we say are goodbyes to friends. son were ready to go after 2 hours and 48 minutes were here London heathcote airport as we arrive we are astonished seeing big planes we don't usually have that In wem when we go in we see a mate with his family and we were going on the same flight anyway both of are family's go to get coffee we go through immigration we say are final goodbyes as tears drop out of there sad eyes we are scarred to death because I haven't seen a plane this big and compared to us we are tiny it started snowing when we were just getting on up up and away we were with a group called the big brother movement as I said to my self yes we're stopping that must mean we're here oh no were in Bangkok ok as I said to my self yes we're stopping that must mean we're here oh no were in Perth I can't believe it again we have stopped you have arrived to your destination were in sydney the 27 hours has paid off or has it as the taxi picks ten of us up we get dropped of at a boarding house in burwood you know what I need a sleep....next morning I go to have breakfast ahhhhhhh ants everywhere I open the window wow it. Is very hot compared to England I hope you enjoyed my story about my dads arrival
Nice how you used your dads story
I liked that we got to know your dad's arrival story
Walk down the lonely footparth trying to find my way around Paris. Looking at all of the pretty in graves the in the foot parth. I see these tiny little magical things flowing around. This may be a bad idea but I going to follow.
To be continued
nice but you have a few words in there that should not be the, aswell as a part where there is a word missing. overall i think you did a wonderful job. i especially liked how you saw tiny little magical things flowing around. it was an interesting story and hope to able to read more
You don't need to say I see these thing you could just say like there were these tiny magical things flowing around .
Nice story liked the catch at the end of it
It was 3:00 in the afternoon , i rushed outside as fast as my leggs could take me to get the mail befor my mum got it. There was four letters,one for mum ,one for dad and one for me. I wonder what it says.
Good job piper nice story. Could of made the story a bit longer
I liked your story piper but check your spelling and I was confused about only three people got a mail each when you said there was four letters
Traveling around Mexico was harder than I thought. Everything was different here the food the clothes the shops and defiantly the people. It was a new step in my life. Trying to get around was hard and not knowing how to speak Mexican . I learnt a few words but not many. Meeting a lot of friends on the way was also fun so I got to experience what it was like to live a Mexican life. I thought to myself maybe I do fit in here .
I liked your story and it was nice but the question i would ask is there going to be more of your writing
I think the best parts were when you talked about the culture of the diffrent country
in mexico they speak spanish there is no such thing as mexican
She was sitting there. In a park with a single peace of paper. I wondered what could be written on that paper. She seemed to be connected to that peace of paper. She had tears running down her face so it must of been special. After she finished reading it her head raised. She shouted out
Like the words you used and very clear.
Write more that stoy was so amazing.
You need to check your spelling mistakes but it was nice to see her connection
Walking through the desert seeing rocks and more rocks I think I am needing food I haven't had it for 2 weeks I am only walking like a sloth slow and smooth. I see a house with people in it finnally. Hopefully they will feed me and I will be their servant if they want. Knock Knock they answer the crickety door she lets me in and she gives me food and I told "I will work for the food " she said "No because this is a homeless shelter well"I told back " I 'm gonna stay for now."
I loved your story but I think you could of edited it a bit better.
A buzz was in the air. The wasp guards defending the beehive were quickly overwhelmed by the insane power of their bloodthirsty, honey stealing oversized cousins, hornets. Then the über bee battalion swarmed. One of these bees was named Acolyte. She was the smallest solider in the battalion but she was the fiercest. She dive bombed a soldier hornet and stabbed it multiple times in the one of it's compound eyes. This hornet flew, not being able to see properly right into the wake of a colony of wasp guards. They dispatched the hornet instantaneously and dumped body over the side of the bee hive and it fell into the brook and was snapped up by a pike who crept back into the reeds waiting for freshly slain soldiers for it to feast on. Acolyte thought about about the fiesta see was going to in a few nights. Out of no where a hornet elite charged, stinger out, blood crazed eyes, ready to kill. Then there was a flash of metal in the the air. A flash of a green laser struck the hornet in the side of head. It was... Iron ant. Iron ant tackled the hornet elite into the brook and fired a rocket, blood and pieces of exoskeleton covering iron ant. Acolyte saluted and the iron ant saluted back. Acolyte started thinking about how this had all happen. It had all started 2 moons ago when the hornets started stealing honey, building an army and taking prisoners and it was now the last straw, they had attacked one of the queen bee's places and stolen one of the royal grubs. Then in under a hour the attacking hornets were driven back.
Have not finished
We rushed into the boats. It's going to be a month before we get there. The first day was preparing for the week we were hooking fish all day for dinner the water was muddy it was to dangerous I didn't eat I was to worried about my family . The first three days I didn't eat or drink at all. To be continued
Wow great story and setting. I felt like I was there.
I liked how you talked about not just humans but bees as we'll
I walked of the boats moored in the choppy water I looked around to see fields of desert, it was so very warm, it should have been winter but for some reason it was super warm I looked around to see cut-throats, and the biggest bank I've ever seen.
My mother looked down to see a greedy face, and that's the story of my great great grand uncle who committed the largest gold robbery in Australia, when he moved from England to Australia
My grandfather explored a realy snowy place,England. He explored England by a big steamship. Snow with ice like getting stuck in thick mud shocked him. The melted ice reminded him of the cold water he had crossed. He shook hands with all different people who had different faces and personalities. He played football over there for the castleford tiger.
My grandfather was a young man he was the best grandfather ever.i visited him every Monday. One Monday I went to visit him no one was home so I went to see my perents and that said grandfather had moved to England
We rushed into the boats. It was going to be month before we get there. The first day was preparing for the first week hooking fish all day for dinner the water was muddy it was dangerous to eat. Fish bones were crushed I didn't eat any food i was to worried about my family. The first three days I didn't eat anything. After a week it felt like we were the only things on earth
Walking throgh the streets marvelling at the floating light. For a second I paused and steared into the golden glow. A strong gust of wind flowed to the street like a sanamie hitting a town as my hat flown of my head. I thorght to my self what if I was one of them I could fly and travel around the world and be
It was cold very cold. He hated it, sleat snow and ice brrrrrr! He and his friend wanted to go traveling foreveeeeeeeeerrrrrrrrr. So they planed a very long road trip. They would travel from Calgary, Canada all the way to the very tip of Patagonia. The approximate time was 5 years and 12 months. They packed their bags and shoved them in the car. They filled it with gas and set of towards the us of a. About halfway their they broke down. They bought a ticket to New Zealand and flew of westwards.
When my dad knew that Russia and Ukraines goverments where going to fall apart, but my mum couldn't come because there wasn't enough room on the plane. A couple of years went by and she could finally come with her son in other ways it's my brother now. When they got here they where astonished by the humongous buildings. After a few years have passed and finally I saw the world for the very first time.
New arrival. Hope you like my story
As the luck drenched out of me, the remote island was small. I had to think fast, "I'm going down the hole. Ahhh!" As i was falling in the great deep hole.
"Woah its beautiful." as i was marveled at the bewilding world under the the doom hole. Roaming in this magical world underneath a remote island.
"Gahh it was a magical dream but how did get into a remote island in a dream?"
As I was leaving my home in Japan to go to crystal falls then I'm going to the USA for 2 weeks. Then bad news we had to plan our trip later because bombs and guns flew everywhere even bullets. Later much much later we got items clos to our old items. Then we found out when we were going on a trip in a year to 2 years. And the planes were gone so we had to go by steam ship, so we packed 2 months worth of food.
Flying around galaxy looking for a homeland astonished by the planets but a big blue ball looked like a good home for me come fire was setting my ship alight boom .I wake up in a field with a cow playing with a stingray then I wake up it was a deam.
Leaving my home I said bye to my family tears dropping from my misrable eyes I slow creeped to the airplane door I said bye again I found my sit. Then I marveled at the huge buildings I crossed a huge ocean and often China and saw the Great Wall of China it was huge I couldn't believe it. Finally I landed it was a little journey for my it was I first plane I went on.
As I was drop into a zoo I land in left over food in a monkey cage.I jump up onto my feet in explored.day after day in the monkeys came more attractive to me they hugged me and looked after me.they wear like my parent's.
My grandad's journey he was born in Scotland and loved reading history books he would some times go in the sowers to see if the
localness monster was there he never found it he travelled to many places around there and had an amazing view of the tall green'y mountains him and his parents and his brother and sister they decided to go to Australia in NSW they bought a house there and settled in there then when they got older they got jobs and got a girlfriend and boyfriend they lived happily the end
A park bench, rusty old and paper thin. The sounds of dripping rain lighting and thunder. My clothes became wet, soggy and heavy. Endless nights of crowding noises in side of my head. I decide to make a move i caught the next train to San Fransisco from San Fransisco i bought a plane ticket to Spain. Spain was a crowded yet beautiful country endless nights of mayhem with excotic people and things. I think i would be staying Spain for a long time.
Sitting down on the cold park bench, depressed about the day i've had. Got fired from work, told my parent about it, then got kicked out of my house, my husband dumped me and now the only people I can talk to are the birds. But the talking does'nt help, it just brings back bad memoris and makes me even more sad. As I reach for my soaking bag, a complete stranger comes up to me and asks,
" are you ok maam?"
I reply " yes im fine"
"ok, well here is something just to make you feel a bit better"
Said the kind man as he gives me $1000 dollars in cash. I could'nt believe my eyes but I took the money anyway.
Living in Australia is helping me and I like how good friends and they respect I and a nothers and john is half Australian and That ment that he loved me and especially when I'm sad he's all ways been there for me