Our Sizzling Story Starts

7/8/2013

No modern James Bond film would start slow. It all starts with action. Why?
It is simply to grab the attention of the audience.

Here are 5M's sizzling story starts. Please read, comment and leave suggestions.

17 Comments

Rahul Singh

7/8/2013 03:47:51 am

Two eye holes the size of two ten cent coins. My mouth is kissing the mouth hole because it is too small. The strings on my ear scratching it. This mask smells terrible, it smells like a squirrel who lives on trash.

Not batman

7/8/2013 03:47:59 am

I love sizzles

Cinta

7/8/2013 03:51:21 am

Stop copying me!

Cinta and Seirra

7/8/2013 03:49:46 am

Water sloshed around everywhere. Everything I saw was blurry. Fish swam around the back of my head. It smelt awful. The octopus was squished between my head and the top of the bowl. It's tentacles were squirming and wiggling everywhere.

Logan

7/8/2013 03:49:49 am

As the water slowly ran down the back of my neck, I could smell the old white frog droppings from last week. I could see the ledge that the frog used to sit on every day until its untimely demise. The world looked warped, looking through the frog tank glass.

Ben

7/8/2013 03:51:07 am

Hobo Jo chased a bird singing I whip my hair back and forth.

Jess, Chloe and Jasmin

7/8/2013 03:51:56 am

I can feel it. Plasticine stuck to my face. Oozing. Tickeling my nose. Hoping it will peel off. I walk into the kitchen hoping my mum won't notice!
"What have you done to your face? It's green!"

That's when it all came out.
"Should I lye? Should I tell the truth?" I thought to myself.
"I was worrying about my face. It was dry. I ran to the spa. They layed me down, and put Plasticine in my face by accident.
"But does she know that it is a lie?" I asked myself quietly

I was restless that night! I couldn't stand not telling her the truth!

Kyle

7/8/2013 03:52:09 am

The smell of soil is disgusting worms are crawling on my shoulders some were trying to get in my mouth.I couldn't see a thing with this plant pot on BANG! I slammed into a brick wall.The kids at school were laughing at me.The bully Bruce Wayne was laughing and spraying me with his water bottle "you need water or you'll wither up and die!" He laughed.

Nicolas link

7/8/2013 03:57:09 am

The. Camellions tree branch keeps on hitting me in the eye. I can see my mouth in the camellions mirror.Its water bowl is splashing in my face. The smell of lizards poo is absolutely unbearable . The world looks a whole lot different when your staring thought glass.

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Rolly

7/8/2013 03:57:25 am

The brown juices oozing down my face and rushing into my mouth was payment for what I did. I opened my mouth for a breath as a rotten banana came charging into my mouth.
"What am I doing with a bin on my head?".

People are staring. Laughing. Throwing garbage at me and saying
"Come here bin, I want to trash talk with you".

"How did I get into this mess, oh yeah, it all started on Wednesday".

R. Tillsley

7/8/2013 06:42:16 am

Wonderfully descriptive. I like the disgust that it raises- connecting us to the character. We are left wondering if the protagonist has gotten themselves into this mess or if it was imposed on them. My feeling is the former as you use the word get rather than landed. I wonder if others agree.

Mr Mc

7/8/2013 08:18:02 am

Thank you for the comment, Mr Tillsley. You're spot on! We based these stories on the guilt that has driven these characters to a desperate and humorous act. I'll share your careful observations and kind comments with everyone tomorrow! Thank you for reading!

Batgirl link

7/8/2013 03:57:37 am

Batman and Robin sliding down the rough slippery roof top. Batmans grappling hook gun isn't working. They're now falling 5 stories plummeting straight down. With their luck they fall straight into a full dumpster. They're now in complete darkness. Feeling a liquid oozing down their pants and the smell of rotten milk making my eyes tear up.

Superman

8/8/2013 03:00:55 am

Nice work batgirl

Who's superman???

8/8/2013 07:32:42 am

Cinta

8/8/2013 01:26:22 pm

Oh no (!) we have to solve whos superman and batgirl Braaavoo!

Nic

9/8/2013 06:29:30 am

In superman

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