The Warden owns the Shade...

11/2/2015

The only trees are two old oaks on the eastern edge of the “lake.” A hammock is stretched between the two trees, and a log cabin stands behind that. The campers are forbidden to lie in the hammock. It belongs to the Warden. The Warden owns the shade.

Inspired by the above and writing together, 5/6M wrote the following:
The only “playground” equipment was the rusty slide near the dark toilets. The slide made a groaning, rickety sound, and the dark toilets loomed over it with a barn door beside it. The children are forbidden to use the slide. It belongs to the Year 6s. The Year 6s own the “playground”.

Read below to see some of 5/6Ms own inspired writing. Please give us stars (tell us our strengths) when you can.

92 Comments

Cherry

11/2/2015 02:19:31 am

The 5/6M "classroom" lay at the end of the corridor upstairs.On the far left.The screams of the chairs and smell of fresh tears lingered in the corridors.Every moment in the "classroom" was just like another day in jail.Nobody was allowed to stand up or waste time.Mr Mac owns the time and space.

****Based On A True Story****

emily skull

11/2/2015 02:42:36 am

thanks for liking it

Zoe

12/2/2015 02:01:29 am

Hi I'm from bankmeadow public school mr mc use to teach us . I love your story and I liked at the end how you said based on a true story .

Yilara

12/2/2015 02:04:58 am

Hi I was in mr mccarrons class last year and I hope you enjoy being in mr mccarrons class. Any ways I think you have a realy good story.

Lochie

12/2/2015 02:07:27 am

Hi Cherry thats a great story but I think you should do some more imagine into your story but overall it is a great story.

Sophia

12/2/2015 02:20:33 am

That's a good story I like the emotion.

Georgia

12/2/2015 02:24:26 am

Good job, Cherry.
Just edit more. :)

emily skull

11/2/2015 02:38:54 am

The only room that is forbidden is the libary,because the only books there are murder stories and theres dead teacher sitting there at the
computer there are brown pages in the books.There are cobwebs everywhere.The toilets where another good bit the water wasnt water it was BLOOD

Cherry

11/2/2015 02:39:46 am

I like murder stories actually

Yilara

12/2/2015 02:13:17 am

Me too hahaha 😃😃

Georgia

12/2/2015 02:01:03 am

Hi I'm one of Mr Mc's students from last year. That was a great story Emily. I loved how you capitalised blood to make it more dramatic.

unicorn fluff

17/2/2015 09:02:45 am

emily skull is coral

Maddie

12/2/2015 02:12:14 am

I like your story ✌️

00_POTATO

14/2/2015 04:03:03 am

Coral that's not what it was. You changed are edit

bronagh

11/2/2015 02:42:20 am

The only "playground" equipment was a rusty old swing. Rumor has it that a young girl died there 6 years ago by hanging herself. They say she had escaped an insane asylum, others say she was just mental. Only she knew what she was doing, only she knew what she was doing.Every year one person just one,DIES,the same time same everything. One year a year 6 dies. The only thing was, the girl who died know one knew except a teacher.She knew who the girl was.she was the girl who died 6 years ago

Cherry

11/2/2015 02:43:29 am

I am going to have nightmares D:

John

12/2/2015 02:13:36 am

I wish I never read that

00_POTATO

14/2/2015 04:05:58 am

HAHAHAHAHAHAHA BRONAGH IS MY BEST FRIEND

Marcus

12/2/2015 02:13:56 am

Hi bronagh that is a great story you are a great writer so keep all the great work up I can imagine the story in my head.

Sophia

12/2/2015 02:18:38 am

That's a brilliant story I like the creepy dark like story

00_POTATO

14/2/2015 04:04:59 am

OMG cherry do I have to keep on telling u Nikki's three easy poop strategy to not have nightmares

unicorn fluff

17/2/2015 09:03:44 am

i edited it i think

crazy cupcake

11/2/2015 02:42:24 am

The only "playground" equipment was the rusty swing near the darkest part of the playground. The darkest part of the playground loomed over it with a barn door beside it. The children are forbidden to use the swings. It belongs to the teachers. The teachers owns the "playground".

Cherry

11/2/2015 02:44:41 am

Why can't we use the playground this is no fair! >:(

Georgia

12/2/2015 02:19:28 am

Crazy Cupcake that was a great story. But I don't know why there needs to be " for playground. But other than that I loved it write more.

unicorn fluff

17/2/2015 09:05:47 am

because it isn't really a playground its a ''playground''

emily skull

11/2/2015 02:45:07 am

very funny crazy cupcake

me AVA

11/2/2015 02:45:39 am

The 5/6M "classroom" was the only classroom which was haunted by the sound of screams. The "classroom" was old, rusty and dark. It was the only "classroom" in the entire school that had stains of blood on the floor. Whoever dared to go into the "classroom" came back like a zombie roaming around the school not knowing what their doing.

Cherry

11/2/2015 02:46:55 am

It was fun editing that! ;D

me AVA

11/2/2015 02:49:37 am

Thanks for commenting some thing nice

Georgia

12/2/2015 02:03:23 am

That was a great piece of writing, your class is pretty talented.
Great job.😃

Zoe

12/2/2015 02:06:56 am

Hi my name is zoe and I'm one of mr mc's students from his old school banks meadow public school....... Your story was very interesting a mysterious I like how you talked about if you go into the class room you will turn into a zombie that was cool ✌️

Chelpin

11/2/2015 02:45:58 am

The only "school" in the City is Fort St Public school, the teachers have all been the same since 1958. All the students that go to that "school" are all locked in their classrooms with their dead teacher. The toilet has no light so all the People that go in there see a bunch of teachers, that are kind of invisible, and have no legs. The students that come out of that toilet seem to be different.

Cherry

11/2/2015 02:47:45 am

I wonder how old the teachers are! :o

That man staring at you in the corner

11/2/2015 02:49:03 am

The only equipment in the playground was a lonely slide. The slide made a noise that sounded like a baby dying. The Year 5 students weren't allowed to go on the slide . It belongs to the Year 6 students. The Year 6s own the fun.....

Cherry

11/2/2015 02:50:01 am

Have you heard a baby die? :o

Blaze

12/2/2015 02:08:40 am

Yes

COOKIES AND CREAM Nadia

11/2/2015 02:54:11 am

Your creeping me out with that name!

mysterious annabelle 2

11/2/2015 11:39:10 am

Great start but the fact that only year 6s were allowed on the slide is unfair

Georgia

12/2/2015 02:04:55 am

Great job, I loved it. I really want to hear more of your stories.

Gabstar

11/2/2015 02:49:24 am

The only windows in the school were at the very front of the school. The windows hold the only light in the entire school. The children are forbidden to go near the the windows. The light belongs to the principal. There is only one rule at our school, never annoy the principal or you'll be in detention untill HIGHSCHOOL!!

Cherry

11/2/2015 02:51:07 am

Poor people! D:

Cookies and cream Nadia

11/2/2015 02:51:43 am

creepy........

Kane

12/2/2015 02:05:01 am

That is very good gabstar it is so interesting

Georgia

12/2/2015 02:12:22 am

Great job writing that, that story was great. Write more.

Lochie

12/2/2015 02:16:30 am

Thats the best story Gabstar because of your imagination you have a great one better then mine keep writing.

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11/2/2015 02:49:46 am

Cookies and cream Nadia link

11/2/2015 02:49:56 am

Fort St Public School was the only school in a little village. The only toys were small,broken,creepy baby dolls near a small,dark room.The baby dolls made a creepy ma,ma noice from a light voice to an evil,low voice.The small,dark room made a weeping (crying) noice.All the children were ban from going near the small, dark room.A dark,evil lady owned the small,dark room.Whoever went in there never came out............

Cherry

11/2/2015 02:52:13 am

I like the way you spelt noice! ;D

mysterious annabelle 2

11/2/2015 11:36:39 am

What do you mean by mama?

Georgia

12/2/2015 02:09:27 am

Great writing Cookies and cream Nadia, but work on editing.
Other than that good job.

Sophia

12/2/2015 02:14:14 am

I like your story it's really good I like the way you make it creepy.

Melissa

12/2/2015 02:24:28 am

Hi great story just make sure you check your spelling before you post it overall I loved your story

savi

11/2/2015 02:50:23 am

There is only one fun water park in ride no zombie in vanishing city.There is only one ride not broken and washed up and that ride is the most fun ride ever and that ride is.

Cherry

11/2/2015 02:53:09 am

Um okay then! ;P

Master h

12/2/2015 02:05:23 am

Savi do you play football for masot

chillyclient640

11/2/2015 02:51:54 am

The only "friends" were three animal like animatronics. As the blood and vains dripping from the dead eyes of the animatronics and the clown music plays in the background, the children are forbidden to enter, which is good considering their colestrole level. The pizza place belongs to the soul of the dead child. the soul owns the pizza place. (I'm liam)

Cherry

11/2/2015 02:53:51 am

Hmm I wonder where you got that from...

John

12/2/2015 02:12:24 am

Nice story but we're did you get that story from'i wonder.

ellie

11/2/2015 02:52:12 am

The floores creaked in the so called "deligtful" holiday home. Caroline was staying at her grandmothers house who had sadly passed away for an unknown. Caroline's crazy mother said staying here would be a good way to reconnect with her grandmother. Caroline was creeped out by her grandma dying unuasly so reconnecting is a thing she didn't want to do. "I shot gun the biggest room" cried Billy. Caroline dropped her bags and started to loose her strength she fell to the ground...

Cherry

11/2/2015 02:55:04 am

I feel sorry for Caroline

Georgia

12/2/2015 02:07:05 am

Awesome writing, I loved how you never said (said) instead you said cried. Good job.

Sophia

12/2/2015 02:11:24 am

Thats a great story you really bring the emotion in to your story.

mysterios annabele 2

11/2/2015 02:52:27 am

The ''fun" water park reeked with the noxious odor of dead rats.The water was dark, murky and seemed to be used as a toilet.The deserted water park was located at the edge of town.The wind groaned as rats scurried around and a black bird gobbled a poison ice cream and died among a dead man.However, not only one dead body was spread acrossthe floor.About a million dead bodies were there.Although it wasn't even oneyear old, it was shut down.Everyone in town was forbidden to go in there.Only the ghosts of dead peoplecould go in.The ghost owned the water park.

Cherry

11/2/2015 02:55:50 am

Matthew why do you write so well! ;O

Sophia

12/2/2015 02:08:16 am

You have a amazing story

Georgina

12/2/2015 02:23:17 am

It is an amazing story keep it up:)

Twich

11/2/2015 02:53:11 am

The only pencils in the school were in a spider infested jar that was at the back of the room. They were dropped in the jar 80 years ago boy named Joseph Andam, know body knows why but he was killed a week ago. Know body touches the pencils. The pencils belong to Joseph. Joseph owns the pencils.

Cherry

11/2/2015 11:09:32 am

That is why we have our own pencils x3

bozo_bum

11/2/2015 12:56:08 pm

is any one online

John

12/2/2015 02:23:59 am

You guys are so good at writing !

bozo_bum

11/2/2015 12:55:22 pm

hio

Elias

12/2/2015 02:12:00 am

Good story bozo_bum

Stardust

12/2/2015 02:16:41 am

Bozo-bum A W E S O M E

bozo_bum

11/2/2015 12:58:09 pm

lalalolo HEHEhahaHEHEhaha

Kane

12/2/2015 02:11:39 am

Great story

Sophia

12/2/2015 02:03:45 am

Hi I'm sophia I was in mr mac class last year I really like your story's there amazing.

Sophia

12/2/2015 02:09:11 am

Sorry Mr Mc

Nathan

12/2/2015 02:06:23 am

Hi I'm part of your buddy class by the way your story's are all awesome good job

NathanM

12/2/2015 02:13:12 am

I'm NathanM the guy down below me is NathanG

Nathan

12/2/2015 02:09:42 am

Mc hi

KYE

12/2/2015 02:12:11 am

Hey bozo_bum I liked your story

Kye

12/2/2015 02:13:09 am

No it's a great story bozo_bum

Nathan

12/2/2015 02:13:10 am

Once opon a time the endq

00_POTATO

12/2/2015 09:51:28 am

HAHAHZ

Nathan

12/2/2015 02:15:10 am

Cherry cherry cherry

unicorn fluff

17/2/2015 09:13:07 am

what did she do wrong

NathanM

12/2/2015 02:18:22 am

Yilara

12/2/2015 02:19:23 am

What's up guys

Imogen

12/2/2015 02:22:02 am

Hi Mr Mac. Miss chris said hi

bozo_bum

12/2/2015 09:27:35 am

who r u

Marcus

12/2/2015 02:22:11 am

Great story bozo_bum

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